Molly’s hair was flat at the crown. Her makeup had spread. (It overran her features; it gave her a watercolor effect.) Even her clothing looked different. As if it denatured. As if threads had loosened in the heat.
I thought Joe was going to be splatted by the train. And not from a suicidal urge on his part. But Mollie would never do that, though. Too nice. I would .
Joe is a dick
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I thought Joe was going to be splatted by the train. And not from a suicidal urge on his part. But Mollie would never do that, though. Too nice. I would .
Brilliant work. I loved it. Thanks.
No — thank you! That’s so nice of you to say. I’m glad you liked it (and yep, should’ve been food for the subway rats)!
This was such a vivid scene, Faith. Painted in so few words.
"Even her clothing looked different. As if it denatured. As if threads had loosened in the heat." -- my absolute favourite line.
Joe, pff. She can do better.
Thank you so much! I appreciate you taking the time to say so — means a lot to me. (As for that line, high school bio coming through!)
And YES, may all the world’s Mollies find peace…